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Joined: 3/16/2011
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Alrighty, I'm looking for a little input from the more experienced writers, which would be about everyone on this site.
What do you think of this hook? Does it need more?
An actor, an author and a stalker embark on a 'killer' romantic cruise.
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Joined: 3/16/2011
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Or perhaps switch the word Killer with Thrilling?
Time to break out the Thesaurus.
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Joined: 5/5/2011
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Keep killer! Is it a cozy? It sounds fun.
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Joined: 1/16/2012
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"killer" is cute, and says what it is, but it is 'marketing speak' - although I guess that's what you want! Thrilling could mean they see bald eagles...
I see you've added more on the actual description, but I do think the purpose of the hook is to set it up, not necessarily say where it goes. I like it!
Really makes you think about how to present it. My book is:
An artist inherits a mysterious painting of her great-grandmother, and their lives intertwine through art forgery and the passionate search for self-expression.
But there's so much more to it than that! Wow, you have to narrow it down to 160 words, deciding what is really important. I'm not sure it works, but it is a fun exercise...I'm still working out what genre it is in! aack!
I really like your writing, so I think your hook is not something you need to worry about!
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